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Remember the feelings of being young
The times that last always in me
no school, no books, or responsibilities
An endless elation lasting an eternity
unlike our days soon retiring into night
as atramentous as the black top
boisterous afternoons and Saturday morning cartoons
kickballs games in the blazing sun
or frigid games of tag in a blanket of snow
when chickenpox and colds meant certain death
and so did girls (cause they were icky)
Always wishing my youth was an epoch
The extent of our youth is the fervor of our heart
because youth is bliss
Youth is the angel that follows you
Maturity is that burly ebony behemoth
and as it fixates its raven eyes upon me
I will look away and gaze upon my youth
scuttle to it and embrace it tightly
clinging to my youth
...
forever
©2005-2009 ~Metal-bass-player
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Author's Comments

ok I have been feeling really youthful recently and I wrote this... I also wanted to explore my vocabulary because I have been told that it would help the quality of my poetry... I really love this one and I am proud of it... enjoy!

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:icononly-jenny:
:? care to explain the big words?
its groot! :D i miss being young :( lol i sound so old

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:icondragonspear:
Nice work man, I tend to love this one the more and more I read it. Great vocabulary, the only thing I want to see you work on is a different structure. I think it wouldn't feel so cluttered if you tried to space it a bit mroe. But this one is amazing, I love it!

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Throughout life you realize that things aren't all they're cracked up to be.
Life's hard enough, don't make it harder than it has to be.
One's true meaning can only be deciphered within their Creator's eyes.

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:iconmetal-bass-player:
thank thank you and when you say "space" what do you mean exactly... like stanzas and such or just trying not to change subjects so much

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Your happiness is a reflection of your view on life
:iconkiladreams:
awesome job.. you really don't realize how much you're leaving behind as you grow older...

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My goal is not to wake up at age 40 with the bitter realization that I have wasted my life on a job I hate because I was forced to decide on a career in my teens.

¡noʎ sǝʌol ɐlıʞ ǝɥʇ
:icondragonspear:
Stanzas, its a great piece but I think it would flow better with more room to let it roam

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Throughout life you realize that things aren't all they're cracked up to be.
Life's hard enough, don't make it harder than it has to be.
One's true meaning can only be deciphered within their Creator's eyes.

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:iconmetal-bass-player:
alrighty thank you... I will try it on the next peice that I write kk

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Your happiness is a reflection of your view on life
:icondragonspear:
Sounds good, I think it would add quite a bit more structure and possibly a better impact to your poetry. We'll see won't we:D

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Throughout life you realize that things aren't all they're cracked up to be.
Life's hard enough, don't make it harder than it has to be.
One's true meaning can only be deciphered within their Creator's eyes.

[link]
:iconezzen16:
anyone would think u were 55. LOL.
Just jokin dave, well done!!*laffing*

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Luv ya, take care
ERin
:iconmetal-bass-player:
thank you thank you!

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Your happiness is a reflection of your view on life

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